Comments on: Friday Flash – One Thought

By: alan

alan — Tue, 22 Sep 2009 03:42:53 +0000

You sound like my wife.

By: CJ

CJ — Tue, 22 Sep 2009 03:13:57 +0000

Solid! Wasn’t sure where you were going, but when I got there – it was satisfying.

By: Eric J. Krause

Eric J. Krause — Sun, 20 Sep 2009 06:09:29 +0000

Very nice! You had the sweet little story twisted away at the end. Just the way I like it.

By: J. M. Strother

J. M. Strother — Sun, 20 Sep 2009 01:45:56 +0000

A pretty powerful piece, Alan. A lot of people go into the military hoping to get that college education and get a much more personal education. PTSD is all too real for so many men and women who serve. Keep ‘em in your thoughts.
~jon

By: Shannon Esposito

Shannon Esposito — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 21:26:44 +0000

Such a valid point. One soul-changing moment can taint all that you love in life. Sad snapshot, but well-crafted.

By: Mark Kerstetter

Mark Kerstetter — Sat, 19 Sep 2009 01:36:02 +0000

That’s a nice sketch.

By: karen from mentor

karen from mentor — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 21:21:01 +0000

I was thinking all the way through…ALAN WROTE THIS? He has a soft mushy center???? Then the ending just about wrenched my heart out.
What a way to show how war damages people.
Great flash sir.
Very powerful punch in a very short piece.
[but you may have just ruined your rep...next week back to snot, spurting blood, beheadings, limb ripping, fangs...that sort of stuff ok? I feel slightly off balance ..]
Karen :0)

By: ganymeder

ganymeder — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 19:15:37 +0000

I liked it! I thought, for a minute, that the one thought was because he was dying and that was what flashed before his eyes. Nice way to twist it!

By: alan

alan — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 15:12:50 +0000

Thanks very much for all the positive comments everyone. I’m particularly pleased that it doesn’t seem to appear rushed. Not sure if I’ll develop it further as an idea but you never know.

Thanks again, you guys rule.

By: Marisa Birns

Marisa Birns — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 14:02:10 +0000

Wonderful imagery. Tightly written and the last two sentences are Wow!

I always love reading you. And yes, this is on par with your others.

Really well done!